Sex-trafficking survivor: ‘God put the best Mormons in my path for me to change’
By PEGGY FLETCHER STACK | The Salt Lake Tribune
First Published Oct 28 2014 06:21PM
Three weeks ago, Laurin Crosson got word that yet another "client" had slit the throat of yet another sex-trafficked woman. Crosson — who spent two decades in that dark, violent world — has seen the scenario painfully play out over and over.
The No. 1 cause of death for women in the sex trade is murder, she says. Many either have no families or have been isolated by pimps. Their bodies often remain unclaimed in morgues.
Lost. Forgotten. Abandoned.
This is a great narrative lead. It brings the reader immediately in on what is obviously a very sad world that many might not be aware of. There is some suspense, some anticipation about what you are going to read next and great descriptive words. It isn't a very fun subject, but this article goes on to educate people about some scary things that go on in the real world. Also with narrative storytelling, it really reconstructs the event and puts the reader right into the scene.
When writing a narrative lead, it is very effective to be dramatic and put the reader on the scene as the action occurs. It is important to use techniques of fiction, dialogue, scene setting and foreshadowing.
This article's lead has some foreshadowing of knowing that "yet another sex-trafficked woman has had her throat slit."
For my editing mistake, I found one that took me a few seconds to figure out what was wrong.
I thought this was a great example because some might not even pick up on the fact that as it reads, it sounds like the "free can of soft drink" is $9. It should probably be written as, "Order any of our pasta meals for $9 and receive a free can of soda."